MY ROOM
I can see my photos on the walls,
Music sounds as a melody for my ears,
Books smells like freshly cut wood,
Keyboard feels as a piano in my hands,
Happiness tastes like me staying in my room.
I can see my photos on the walls,
Music sounds as a melody for my ears,
Books smells like freshly cut wood,
Keyboard feels as a piano in my hands,
Happiness tastes like me staying in my room.
Lovely, Anna! Remember though: SOUNDS LIKE / FEELS LIKE + NOUN
AND books = plural Books SMELL like.....
THE keyboard
AND books = plural Books SMELL like.....
THE keyboard
SPRING'S AIR
-I can see trees and flowers around me,
-The butterfly sounds as if she is playing with a child,
-The air smells of flowers that have just blossomed,
-The flowers fell breakable in my hair,
-The orange juice tastes like a refreshing bath in the sea.
-I can see trees and flowers around me,
-The butterfly sounds as if she is playing with a child,
-The air smells of flowers that have just blossomed,
-The flowers fell breakable in my hair,
-The orange juice tastes like a refreshing bath in the sea.
Great work!
The flowers FEEL .... 'breakable' sounds a bit strange....what about 'delicate'?
The flowers FEEL .... 'breakable' sounds a bit strange....what about 'delicate'?
THE GARDEN'S MAGIC
I can see the harmony of nature,
The birds sound as though they are having the time of their lives,
The air smells of lemons that are on the tree,
Lemons taste like the cake my grandmother used to bake me,
I feel as if I were in another dimension.
I can see the harmony of nature,
The birds sound as though they are having the time of their lives,
The air smells of lemons that are on the tree,
Lemons taste like the cake my grandmother used to bake me,
I feel as if I were in another dimension.
Lovely, Sara!
SUMMERTIME ? ?
I can see the rays of the sun through my beach umbrella,
All around me smells of sunscreen freshly smeared,
It feels very hot today, as if the sun wants to explode,
My skin already tastes as if all the salt from the see had come up to it,
It sounds as if another summer has just arrived.
I can see the rays of the sun through my beach umbrella,
All around me smells of sunscreen freshly smeared,
It feels very hot today, as if the sun wants to explode,
My skin already tastes as if all the salt from the see had come up to it,
It sounds as if another summer has just arrived.
My skin already tastes as if all the salt from the sea had covered it? OK?
Really nice....I hope we can go to the beach to feel these feelings soon!
Really nice....I hope we can go to the beach to feel these feelings soon!
yes okaaaay! thank you so much!
Lying on the beach:
I can see children playing with their parents
Waves in the water sound relaxing
Coconut smells sweet and fruity
My skin feels burning
My mouth tastes like salt.
Sitting in the crowd.
I can see people hurrying along the streets,
their voices sound like an interminable but catchy song,
the air smells of their perfumes.
I feel their breath on me
and in the meanwhile I drink my coffee which tastes more sugared than usual.
I can see people hurrying along the streets,
their voices sound like an interminable but catchy song,
the air smells of their perfumes.
I feel their breath on me
and in the meanwhile I drink my coffee which tastes more sugared than usual.
more sugary?
But I'm nitpicking.
It's lovely!
But I'm nitpicking.
It's lovely!
BY THE LAKE
I can see children making sand castles and laughing.
The ducks sound as if they were calling each other.
The air smells of sunscreen just spread on the skin.
The sand fells like sugar on morning biscuits
And this ice-cream tastes like the best dessert I have ever eaten.
I can see children making sand castles and laughing.
The ducks sound as if they were calling each other.
The air smells of sunscreen just spread on the skin.
The sand fells like sugar on morning biscuits
And this ice-cream tastes like the best dessert I have ever eaten.
'feels' rather than 'fells' I assume...?
I love the image of the crunchy sand like the sugar on biscuits!!!
I love the image of the crunchy sand like the sugar on biscuits!!!
MORNING OUTSIDE
I can see cats playing with each other
The wind sounds as if he is sweeping away all the bad things
The flat smells of the meal mum is making
The air feels kind against my skin
The coffee tastes like the best thing in the morning
I can see cats playing with each other
The wind sounds as if he is sweeping away all the bad things
The flat smells of the meal mum is making
The air feels kind against my skin
The coffee tastes like the best thing in the morning
Lovely!
Do you see the wind as a masculine presence? In a poem this is fine...I'm just curious.
Do you see the wind as a masculine presence? In a poem this is fine...I'm just curious.
THE UNKNOWN JOURNEY
the birds chirping while the clouds skitter across the sky
the evening breeze gently touching the mountain side
the evening blue sky aching to stay longer without any disguise,
the laughter of children playing in the streets
without any shoes covering their feet,
the sound of waves crashing against the bay
without a single reason to stay,
the days come and go
and I don't want to really know
where we are going to go
the birds chirping while the clouds skitter across the sky
the evening breeze gently touching the mountain side
the evening blue sky aching to stay longer without any disguise,
the laughter of children playing in the streets
without any shoes covering their feet,
the sound of waves crashing against the bay
without a single reason to stay,
the days come and go
and I don't want to really know
where we are going to go
Brilliant! I love it!